Post by Guest on Jul 16, 2008 19:40:52 GMT
Denied!
Hey there, I saw nothing generally wrong with your punctuation/spelling, but the length of your Application is too short.
There's a fixed rule upon this board, that you must at least post in length of 15 sentences (at least one big paragraph size). You may edit your application to suit these standards, write more, otherwise. I'm sorry.
~Danny
Account E-Mail:ell_619@hotmail.com
Name:Elliot Watson
Nationality:English
What Army will Your Character Serve Beneath?
UK
Character History:
Born in Manchester UK, Elliot was born into typical armed forces family. His Dad was a soldier and his older brother had dreams of joining the army from a young age. He never planned on joining the army, but after failing to gain many qualifications at school he realized being a soldier was possibly the only thing he was good at.
Military Rank:
Private.
Writing Sample: Elliot tensed his muscles tightly as he firmed his grip on his rifle. He was cold, tired and just wanted to get the hell out of here. He tried to shuffle onto his side but was conscious on the amount of sound he was making. He heard a crunch not to far from where he was residing. It was the sound made when a boot steps onto a crunchy leaf.
He closed his eye's tight and though about his family. He was in two minds, does he dare fight back? or does he risk being captured or dieing in shame at not taking any nazi's with him.
Hey there, I saw nothing generally wrong with your punctuation/spelling, but the length of your Application is too short.
There's a fixed rule upon this board, that you must at least post in length of 15 sentences (at least one big paragraph size). You may edit your application to suit these standards, write more, otherwise. I'm sorry.
~Danny
Account E-Mail:ell_619@hotmail.com
Name:Elliot Watson
Nationality:English
What Army will Your Character Serve Beneath?
UK
Character History:
Born in Manchester UK, Elliot was born into typical armed forces family. His Dad was a soldier and his older brother had dreams of joining the army from a young age. He never planned on joining the army, but after failing to gain many qualifications at school he realized being a soldier was possibly the only thing he was good at.
Military Rank:
Private.
Writing Sample: Elliot tensed his muscles tightly as he firmed his grip on his rifle. He was cold, tired and just wanted to get the hell out of here. He tried to shuffle onto his side but was conscious on the amount of sound he was making. He heard a crunch not to far from where he was residing. It was the sound made when a boot steps onto a crunchy leaf.
He closed his eye's tight and though about his family. He was in two minds, does he dare fight back? or does he risk being captured or dieing in shame at not taking any nazi's with him.