Moritz Waimer

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Account E-Mail: [e-mail]
Name:Moritz Waimer

Nationality:German.


Character History:
- Moritz was born in Augsburg in 1912(27 at the start of the war) and was brought up by both his parents, but his mother died in 1932 from typhoid. His father was a pilot in World War one. He shot down a total of 20 British planes. Moritz always dreamed of following his father’s footsteps.
He has a average school record, and was always criticized for daydreaming. He was quite popular, but was bullied by a boy two years older than him named Hermann, who Moritz, to his amusement, found on the side of the street begging for food 15 years on. He joined the Hitler youth, after being heavily encouraged by his dad, which helped receive a invitation to join the Luftwaffe after his 20th birthday. He went to Munich university, and got a degree in Mechanics, and literally straight after went to the Luftwaffe training camp.
He entered the Luftwaffe seven years before Nazi Germany declared war on Poland.
He is trained in flying the nifty Focke-Wulf Fw 190. He named his plane “Amelie” after his childhood sweetheart, who died two years before from Cholera.
He has flown in about five minor battles and has shot down six British planes.


Military Rank: ABOVE Oberfeldwebel

Writing Sample:
-Scenario: The same think kept going through Moritz’s head. he disappeared 20 minutes ago. Now I’m alone, and scared. There’s a plane, probably British. I’ve caught glimpses of it, it appeared behind a cloud, then it disappeared again. he knew he was being followed. He decided to do the only reasonable thing, turn around, and catch him by surprise.

He did a full loop, he had practiced it so many times in friendly airspace, but now that he was behind enemy lines, it felt different. Very.

Then it appeared, right in front of his propeller. He swerved left, and went into a near vertical dive, to gain speed. He pulled up, he saw the ocean. He was above the English channel. He speed off, before the RAF pilot even got a proper glimpse. He felt the air pound against his glasses, time to go home he thought, as he raced across the channel, towards the Third reich in his beloved Focke-Wulf Fw 190, or “Amelie”.

If there’s anything I missed, please notify me

[Momo]

Account E-Mail: [e-mail]
Name:Moritz Waimer

Nationality:German.


Character History:
- Moritz was born in Augsburg in 1912(27 at the start of the war) and was brought up by both his parents, but his mother died in 1932 from typhoid. His father was a pilot in World War one. He shot down a total of 20 British planes. Moritz always dreamed of following his father’s footsteps.
He has a average school record, and was always criticized for daydreaming. He was quite popular, but was bullied by a boy two years older than him named Hermann, who Moritz, to his amusement, found on the side of the street begging for food 15 years on. He joined the Hitler youth, after being heavily encouraged by his dad, which helped receive a invitation to join the Luftwaffe after his 20th birthday. He went to Munich university, and got a degree in Mechanics, and literally straight after went to the Luftwaffe training camp.
He entered the Luftwaffe seven years before Nazi Germany declared war on Poland.
He is trained in flying the nifty Focke-Wulf Fw 190. He named his plane “Amelie” after his childhood sweetheart, who died two years before from Cholera.
He has flown in about five minor battles and has shot down six British planes.


Military Rank: ABOVE Oberfeldwebel

Writing Sample:
-Scenario: The same think kept going through Moritz’s head. he disappeared 20 minutes ago. Now I’m alone, and scared. There’s a plane, probably British. I’ve caught glimpses of it, it appeared behind a cloud, then it disappeared again. he knew he was being followed. He decided to do the only reasonable thing, turn around, and catch him by surprise.

He did a full loop, he had practiced it so many times in friendly airspace, but now that he was behind enemy lines, it felt different. Very.

Then it appeared, right in front of his propeller. He swerved left, and went into a near vertical dive, to gain speed. He pulled up, he saw the ocean. He was above the English channel. He speed off, before the RAF pilot even got a proper glimpse. He felt the air pound against his glasses, time to go home he thought, as he raced across the channel, towards the Third reich in his beloved Focke-Wulf Fw 190, or “Amelie”.

He arrived in newly conquered France, and landed on a military airstrip in Normandy. There he refueled and had a few sips of a horribly tasting coffee, that always settled his raging nerves and set off towards Germany, the flight took about two hours, and finally he landed on a small airstrip near the city of Augsburg.

If there's anything wrong, please notify me

Also, i don't think you can modify as a guest, so i'll just re-post, as i realised my writing sample was three lines short.

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Moderation Post:

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Hey there, unfortunately sign-up ranks are permitted between the following.

Enlisted: (Using British ranks as a quick example)
Private to Sergeant, with Staff Sergeant for spectacular applications.

Commissioned: (Using British ranks as a quick example)
Second Lieutenant to (1st) Lieutenant, with Captain for spectacular applications.

The current rank you're trying to achieve is invalid, however, due to your "very" short application barely making the posting limit (as you so said yourself) and with numerous grammatical and puncuation errors, you have not reached any rank above the standard enlisted Private rank.

If you feel you would wish to achieve higher or have another attempt at re-writing your application, then may I suggest you forward your application to this thread; Application proof reading and take on board any advice you may be given.

However, if you feel you may not achieve a higher standard application, then you may take the rank of Private. Also, please keep your posts up to a strict minimum of fifteen lines per' role playing post, as this forum is home to avid intermediate role players.

Thank you, please notify me of your choice below.
~Danny[/color]

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I think i might come back in a few years time, when my English standard has increased, as i usually post 1-2 lines in other role-plays

So, 'till a few years