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Account:Tadeusz
E-mail:[e-mail]

Name:Tadeusz Sadowski

Nationality:Germany

Army:Nazi/German Army

Character Background:Tadeusz was born in 1910 Berlin,Germany.He was the son of a soldier who was killed during the great war when he was only 6.After the war his mother became the wife of a wealthy Major for the army.He told Tad all sorts of stories about the war,but what intrigued Tadeusz the most was the giant machines know as tanks.He went into a military academy when was 12 and graduated in 1930.After a fatal car accident his mother and step dad were killed.He served as a artillery gunner till he was chosen to become a tank commander in 1936.He was put into the 4th panzer Division and started training for the war.He has brown hair,blue eyes and is 5'11.Being an excessive gambler he plays allot of poker when off duty.He is also a devoted catholic and tries to get to service every Sunday.He does not believe in Hitlers ideals but is a true patriot to the fatherland.

Rank:Tank Commander

Writing Sample

Thou the dead of night a men crawls from a fiery wreckage that was his tank.Got to get..away,Tad thought.Trying to pull himself with his arms.Clutching at the ground he pulls himself as his broken leg is dragged.Please God help me get thou please ,whispered Tad.Grinding his teeth he feels the fear that infantry men feel.Not protected and alone.Making his way down a hill he flips over and silently rolls down.Every turn pain,every time.He can't take much more.Thinking he should just yell out and let a soviet sniper take care of him,no I can't thats a cowards ways out.Sliding into a stream he cups his hands and take a sip.Cool and nice,He wishes he didn't leave his canteen in the tank.The feel of being watched is in his mind.If he is why can't they already end it?Never mind got to get back to the camp he thought.Starting back up and crawling he could hear voices in the background.Luckily they were to far back.If they see me they could just walk up and beat me if they wanted to do,which they probably did.Those savages he thought how could they just shoot Heinrich like that.Turning his mind from that memory he sees lights.A fire he thought.He crept up closer and saw it was a squad of men.Looking like they might be Germans he didn't care the pain was spreading.He shouted.

[SGT. Brian Baker]

issuingorders.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=axisapplication1&action=display&thread=49

We currently do not have any ranks known as "Tank Commanders". The above link shows you the ranks within the Wermacht.

[Guest]

Rank:Feldwebel
but I can start off as a private if needed

[SGT. Brian Baker]

Yes, you can start off as a private.

[Guest]

so can I now login?

[∬: Erik Schneider]

First off, when Strum recommended you to check out this link: issuingorders.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=ioguides&action=display&thread=1474. You probably should have. Another helpful guide to the site can be found here: issuingorders.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=beginnersguide1&action=display&thread=2463.

I'd advise you look at both and read through them, before posting another app. Both hold valuable information to get off to a good start on the site. For instance, the minimum RP post length is 15 lines. This applies to both the History and Sample which will need at least 15 lines to qualify for a low Private rank. So please, take a look through those helpful guides and revise your application and then you will be accepted.

[Guest]

I'll give you Obergefreiter since you've posted three apps, and this one still has several errors, mainly spacing and tense.

-JT

Account:Tadeusz
E-mail:EDITED OUT!

Name:Tadeusz Sadowski

Nationality:Germany

Army:Nazi/German Army

Character Background:Through generations of loyalty for Germany the Sadowski family always fought against the enemies of the fatherland.In 1910 Tadeusz Sadowski was born in Berlin.His mother was baroness while his father was the son of a famous calvary officer that fought in the Boer wars.His son joined the army at a young age and grew to be a sergeant.He went on to fight in the great war but was killed in the battle of Somme.Meanwhile In Germany Tad grew and was home schooled by the finest tutors.His mother remarried to a well know officer who taught Tadeusz all he knew about hunting,fighting,and gambling.What interested Tad the most was his stepfathers war stories.He really seemed interested in the metal giants called tanks.
As a boy Tadeusz was taught all about math,science,history,and many other classes.He was not well acquainted with other kid and spent his time mostly in the markets and helped with shops and stores.At the age of 12 he was put into a military academy.He was a fine student and enjoyed whenever he was able to go to the firing range.When he was 15 his mother and step dad were killed in a car accident.After their deaths he lived with his friend's family till he became 18 when he enlisted in the wermacht.He did fine and was accepted to join in the new tank divisions.He became an excessive gambler and spent most of his free time playing poker.Even with his bad habit he still went to mass every Sunday.He did not agree to Hitlers ideas and was pushed back for that.
In 1935 He was transfered to the 4th panzer division and became a lieutenant.He was one of the first to test the new panders and seemed very impress.He will fight to the end to protect Germany.

Rank:Feldwebel


Writing Sample:
Thou the dead of night a men crawls from a fiery wreckage that was his tank.Got to get..away,Tad thought.Trying to pull himself with his arms.Clutching at the ground he pulls himself as his broken leg is dragged.Please God help me get thou please ,whispered Tad.Grinding his teeth he feels the fear that infantry men feel.Not protected and alone.Making his way down a hill he flips over and silently rolls down.Every turn pain,every time.He can't take much more.Thinking he should just yell out and let a soviet sniper take care of him,no I can't thats a cowards ways out.Sliding into a stream he cups his hands and take a sip.Cool and nice,He wishes he didn't leave his canteen in the tank.The feel of being watched is in his mind.If he is why can't they already end it?Never mind got to get back to the camp he thought.Starting back up and crawling he could hear voices in the background.Luckily they were to far back.If they see me they could just walk up and beat me if they wanted to do,which they probably did.Those savages he thought how could they just shoot Heinrich like that.Turning his mind from that memory he sees lights.A fire he thought.He crept up closer and saw it was a camp.Looking like they might be Germans he didn't care the pain was spreading.He shouted.
He heard nothing,Grinding his teeth he decided to shout again.''Hilfe''Tadeusz repeated.He then saw movement from the corner of his eyes.He tried to turn but the immense pain stopped him.He could imagine a soviet creep behind him a knife in the men hand,getting closer,closer.Before Tadeusz could fade into unconsciousness he heard a voice.A German accent or was it Russian.His ears still rang from the explosion.Tadeusz yelled once more.He then heard a reply.It was German.A small grin appeared across Tadeusz face.It then vanished when he heard the voice repeat''where are you?''.He coughed out''over here''.He started to hear foot steps and could make out a figure.The figure got closer till Tadeusz saw it was a soldier.Tadeusz said''over here'' and saw the men walk up.He was German.Tadeusz smiled then fainted.


This should do