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[Paul]

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Name: Nigel "Finch" Kubasek

Nationality: British

What Army will Your Character Serve Beneath?
UK, US or Soviet: UK

Character History:
Nigel was born to rather wealthy parents in Leicester. Niegel had a very good childhood. He had lots of friends at school. Although the exact date and year of Niegels birth is uknown it is guessed to be around November 17th 1918. Niegel's father was a Factory owner and his mom was a stay at home mom. Niegel has dark brown hair, and is medium built. He stands about 5'10 and has a good sense of humor. Niegel always loved school, and planned on having a good job someday. He never thought that he would eventually go into the military. When niegel was 18 his father suffered a stroke and nearly died. Niegel took over running the factory until 1939. On august 1st, 1939 Niegel left the factory and joined the royal forces as an corporal. Niegel trained in the Royal armed forces until september 3rd, 1939. he was than sent to fight against the germans. After three months on the front lines he suffered an injury to his left hand. a piece of shrapnel had gone through the middle of his hand and he was also shot in the left shoulder with a kar 98. He was sent back to england to recover and train some more.




Nigel trained untill july 1st, 1941. By this time he was no longer a corporal but a Sergeant. Niegel slowly worked his way to the rank of lieutenant by showing his leadership skills on the battle field. even tho he was a lieutenant he stilled remained as a sniper. Niegel was later sent back to the front on august 13th, 1941. Niegel fought barevly against the Germans. He was later captured along with thirteen other soldiers. They were placed in a POW camp for three months. After the three months Niegel and the thirteen men made a break out attempt. When they got out one of the men was immeditaly gunned down. The Germans chased after Niegel and the now 12 soldiers. Niegel took three men with him and hid in a house of a farmers. The Germans searched the house but luckly did not find Niegel and the three men. The other 9 men scattered throughout a city. Niegel knew German pretty well. The farmer supplied Niegel and the three men with civlian clothes. Niegel and the three men went through the town and while they were passing by a house one of the men they knew ran out. The man was screaming no but than suffered a luger bullet to the back. He tried to crawl away but was shot again this time in the back of the head. Niegel and the three men continued on. They did not know what ever came to be of the others. Niegel and the three men made their way to the British channel. From there they got a ride from a man who had a boat. Once Niegel got back to england he was promoted to 2nd Lieutenant for his bravery and well sorta a rescue mission.
Niegel was later sent back to the front for his third time. Niegel enjoyed fighting for england. He also enjoyed hearing about churchills speechs to the british people. They always brought his morale up. Niegel was asked to join a new group in the british army except it was special forces, British SAS. Niegel declined the offer and stayed on the front fighting off the Germans.

Military Rank: Lt. or whatever works


Writing Sample:
Scenario:
Niegel was waiting in a bush with his sniper rifle when he heard a noise. He thought it was one of his men, he looked back and saw no one. he slowly crept his way down the line trying to see for any british, None. Niegel thought to himself "Damn it they must have retreated". Niegel saw a dead british man lying on the ground, he recognized him as Pvt. O'Malley. Suddenly Niegel heard some German being spoken. He quickly dropped ot the ground and took some blood from where O'Malley was and applied it to the back and front of his chest where his heart would be located. He made it look as real as possible and quickly layed in a bush. The Germans came walking up the hill and looked for british. They saw O'Malley and knew he was dead. They looked to Niegel's bush and saw his sleeve. They walked to the bush and checked Niegel. Niegel did not breath while the Germans were around. Niegel than knew he was no longer in British territory. The Germans thought Niegel was dead and walked off. Niegel breathed immeditaly after the Germans started down the hill. Niegel waited about ten minutes before moving. He than got up and slowly crept toward the area he and his fellow comrades had came from several hours before.





Niegel heard foot steps behind him. This scarred Niegel since it could be a German and the fact that he is all alone behind enemy lines. A German grabbed Niegel and tried to choke him. The German did not have a weapon with him it seemed. Niegel reached for his Knife he kept in his breast pocket. Once he pulled it out he stuck it in the Germans throat. The German let go of Niegels throat and screamed in pain. Germans that were rather close heard the screams and darted toward the noise. Niegel heard the Germans yell asking what is there. Niegel quickly concealed himself as well as he could in a near by bush. He looked to his right and there layed a dead comrade with a sten in his hands. Niegel took the Sten and waited for the Germans. Two Germans came running to the dead body of the German. They saw the knife and knew right away that a Brit was nearby. Niegel popped out of his hiding place and emptied what was left of the clip into both Germans chest's. The Germans died immediatly because they were hit in the heart.






Niegel started running and tripped. The sten flew out of his hands. When he went to stand up a German kicked him back down. When he looked up there was three Germans standing there. two had mp 40s and one had a walther p38. "Fuck you jerries!" Niegel yelled to the Germans. One German aimed the walther p38 toward Niegels head. Right when he was about to shoot the three Germans were gunned down. Niegel listened to the gun shots. Two of the Germans died immeditaly. "A Bren???!?!" Niegel said. Suddenly the third German sat up holding his stomach with one hand and aimed his walther p38 at the coming british. Another three shots were fired. Two shots hit the Germans chest, and the last shot hit him in the throat. It tore the Germans throat up. The German tried to scream but could not. The German quickly bled to death. Suddenly a corporal with a bren came to Niegel and helped him up. "That Jerry nearly got ya sir!" shouted the corporal. "thanks for saving my arse mate" Niegel said to the coporal. Niegel than recognized the Corporal. " Corporal Collins!, bout time i see a man i know. Now get me back to our lines" Niegel exclaimed. The Corporal nodded and took Niegel back to the british defensive lines.





Once back into british territory Niegel visited the Batt. HQ. A Colonel offered him a nice cup of coffee and explained a new plan to strike back at the Germans. After leaving the Batt. HQ, Niegel went to the nearest bed he found and immediatly went to sleep. Niegel was waken by the sound of artillary fire. He quickly jumped to his feet. Suddenly a Motar hit near him luckly he was not injured but it did blow him off his feet. Niegel staggered to his feet and put on his helmet and grabbed his sniper rifle. He dashed west away from the artillary and motar fire. Niegel met up with a fellow soldier and was asked where to go. Niegel replied with "Anywhere but here soldier!". Niegel tried to find more soldiers and was lucky to find a couple here and there. Niegel dropped to his knees and prayed. Niegel only feared one thing, and that was being killed in action. After the motar and artillary fire stopped, Niegel and the rest of the battalion linked up and planned their assault.






You’re alone behind enemy lines and you get the eerie feeling someone’s watching you. You’re trying to remain quiet, stay low, work your way back to the frontlines - but you can’t help but feel you’re being followed… (How does your character React? What’s running through their mind?)

[Paul]

OOC: i noticed i had some errors i fix a couple but not all




Account E-Mail: EDITED OUT!

Name: Nigel "Finch" Kubasek

Nationality: British

What Army will Your Character Serve Beneath?
UK, US or Soviet: UK

Character History:
Nigel was born to rather wealthy parents in Leicester. Niegel had a very good childhood. He had lots of friends at school. Although the exact date and year of Niegels birth is uknown it is guessed to be around November 17th 1918. Niegel's father was a Factory owner and his mom was a stay at home mom. Niegel has dark brown hair, and is medium built. He stands about 5'10 and has a good sense of humor. Niegel always loved school, and planned on having a good job someday. He never thought that he would eventually go into the military. When niegel was 18 his father suffered a stroke and nearly died. Niegel took over running the factory until 1939. On august 1st, 1939 Niegel left the factory and joined the royal forces as an corporal. Niegel trained in the Royal armed forces until september 3rd, 1939. he was than sent to fight against the germans. After three months on the front lines he suffered an injury to his left hand. a piece of shrapnel had gone through the middle of his hand and he was also shot in the left shoulder with a kar 98. He was sent back to england to recover and train some more.




Nigel trained untill july 1st, 1941. By this time he was no longer a corporal but a Sergeant. Niegel slowly worked his way to the rank of lieutenant by showing his leadership skills on the battle field. even tho he was a lieutenant he stilled remained as a sniper. Niegel was later sent back to the front on august 13th, 1941. Niegel fought barevly against the Germans. He was later captured along with thirteen other soldiers. They were placed in a POW camp for three months. After the three months Niegel and the thirteen men made a break out attempt. When they got out one of the men was immeditaly gunned down. The Germans chased after Niegel and the now 12 soldiers. Niegel took three men with him and hid in a house of a farmers. The Germans searched the house but luckly did not find Niegel and the three men. The other 9 men scattered throughout a city. Niegel knew German pretty well. The farmer supplied Niegel and the three men with civlian clothes. Niegel and the three men went through the town and while they were passing by a house one of the men they knew ran out. The man was screaming no but than suffered a luger bullet to the back. He tried to crawl away but was shot again this time in the back of the head. Niegel and the three men continued on. They did not know what ever came to be of the others. Niegel and the three men made their way to the British channel. From there they got a ride from a man who had a boat. Once Niegel got back to england he was promoted to 2nd Lieutenant for his bravery and well sorta a rescue mission.
Niegel was later sent back to the front for his third time. Niegel enjoyed fighting for england. He also enjoyed hearing about churchills speechs to the british people. They always brought his morale up. Niegel was asked to join a new group in the british army except it was special forces, British SAS. Niegel declined the offer and stayed on the front fighting off the Germans.

Military Rank: Lt. or whatever works


Writing Sample:
Scenario:
Niegel was waiting in a bush with his sniper rifle when he heard a noise. He thought it was one of his men, he looked back and saw no one. he slowly crept his way down the line trying to see for any british, None. Niegel thought to himself "Damn it they must have retreated". Niegel saw a dead british man lying on the ground, he recognized him as Pvt. O'Malley. Suddenly Niegel heard some German being spoken. He quickly dropped to the ground and took some blood from where O'Malley was and applied it to the back and front of his chest where his heart would be located. He made it look as real as possible and quickly layed in a bush. The Germans came walking up the hill and looked for british. They saw O'Malley and knew he was dead. They looked to Niegel's bush and saw his sleeve. They walked to the bush and checked Niegel. Niegel did not breath while the Germans were around. Niegel than knew he was no longer in British territory. The Germans thought Niegel was dead and walked off. Niegel breathed immeditaly after the Germans started down the hill. Niegel waited about ten minutes before moving. He than got up and slowly crept toward the area he and his fellow comrades had came from several hours before.





Niegel heard foot steps behind him. This scarred Niegel since it could be a German and the fact that he is all alone behind enemy lines. A German grabbed Niegel and tried to choke him. The German did not have a weapon with him it seemed. Niegel reached for his Knife he kept in his breast pocket. Once he pulled it out he stuck it in the Germans throat. The German let go of Niegels throat and screamed in pain. Germans that were rather close heard the screams and darted toward the noise. Niegel heard the Germans yell asking what is there. Niegel quickly concealed himself as well as he could in a near by bush. He looked to his right and there layed a dead comrade with a sten in his hands. Niegel took the Sten and waited for the Germans. Two Germans came running to the dead body of the German. They saw the knife and knew right away that a Brit was nearby. Niegel popped out of his hiding place and emptied what was left of the clip into both Germans chest's. The Germans died immediatly because they were hit in the heart.






Niegel started running and tripped. The sten flew out of his hands. When he went to stand up a German kicked him back down. When he looked up there was three Germans standing there. two had mp 40s and one had a walther p38. "Fuck you jerries!" Niegel yelled to the Germans. One German aimed the walther p38 toward Niegels head. Right when he was about to shoot the three Germans were gunned down. Niegel listened to the gun shots. Two of the Germans died immeditaly. "A Bren???!?!" Niegel said. Suddenly the third German sat up holding his stomach with one hand and aimed his walther p38 at the coming british. Another three shots were fired. Two shots hit the Germans chest, and the last shot hit him in the throat. It tore the Germans throat up. The German tried to scream but could not. The German quickly bled to death. Suddenly a corporal with a bren came to Niegel and helped him up. "That Jerry nearly got ya sir!" shouted the corporal. "thanks for saving my arse mate" Niegel said to the coporal. Niegel than recognized the Corporal. " Corporal Collins!, bout time i see a man i know. Now get me back to our lines" Niegel exclaimed. The Corporal nodded and took Niegel back to the british defensive lines.





Once back into british territory Niegel visited the Batt. HQ. A Colonel offered him a nice cup of coffee and explained a new plan to strike back at the Germans. After leaving the Batt. HQ, Niegel went to the nearest bed he found and immediatly went to sleep. Niegel was waken by the sound of artillary fire. He quickly jumped to his feet. Suddenly a Motar hit near him luckly he was not injured but it did blow him off his feet. Niegel staggered to his feet and put on his helmet and grabbed his sniper rifle. He dashed west away from the artillary and motar fire. Niegel met up with a fellow soldier and was asked where to go. Niegel replied with "Anywhere but here soldier!". Niegel tried to find more soldiers and was lucky to find a couple here and there. Niegel dropped to his knees and prayed. Niegel only feared one thing, and that was being killed in action. After the motar and artillary fire stopped, Niegel and the rest of the battalion linked up and planned their assault. The British struck the German lines with all they had. After 48 endless hours the Germans retreated. Niegel knew that this was only the beggning and the war would not be over for a long while.



Niegel later went back to O'malleys dead body and buried it the place it be laying. After burying one of his friends, Niegel tried to find a good position for when the Germans counter attacked. Niegel was very nervous of if he would survive the war or not. There was no attack that night, but in the dawn there would be a surprise for the British. At dawn Niegel observed outside from a window in a three story house. At the horizion there was a lot of mist. He could barely make out what it was. He took some binoculars and observed. There was about three battalion worths of infantry marching toward the city. Suddenly Niegel heard the roaring sound of a tank. He looked again at the horizion. Three panzers were driving also toward the British lines in the city. Niegel screamed out " Jerries on the horizon!, Two battalions worth with three panzers!".


British men started taking defensive positions. They had only one anti-tank squad. Which only contained of one anti-tank rifle. Niegel backed from the window. He waited by the stairs for the firing to start. Finially the firign started and the tanks roar grew louder. Niegel approcahed the window slowly. He looked out the window and saw one tank was destroyed and some of the infantry dead. It seemed as if the Germans were invincible. All because of the great amount of soldiers taking part in this counter attack. Niegel was too nervous to fight. He went back to the staircase and waited. Niegel zoned out for about ten minutes. Once his mind came back to reality he looked around. The tanks roar was so loud it could make you deaf. Niegel walked to the window and looked below. There sat a Panzer with an officer with half his body showing from an open hatch. Niegel looked back toward where he originally was positioned on the hill. He saw about ten British soldiers running up the hill. He than saw them gunned down by German troops. Niegel than hear foot steps on the stairs. He turned and looked. His rifle still laying by the stairs. A German came up the stairs. He looked no older than 15. He was a nervous young lad. He aimed his k98k toward Niegel. Niegel put his hands up and did not say anything. Niegel knew he was beat. The German boy than told Niegel that he was not goign to hurt him and say that the building was clear. Niegel was shocked that the boy was not going to do anything to Niegel. Niegel than took off his uniform and switched it for some clothes in a closet in the bedroom. he hid his rifle and military uniform in the closet.

[Edward"Butcher"McMillan]

Although you have great length in your application, you changed tense a few times, missed a few grammar errors, capitalization errors, and starting a new thought should start a new paragragh.

I'll accept you at Sergeant, with the high amount of COs on the board already, it is difficult to opbtain a rank of that stature.

Should you have any questions please feel free to PM a staff member or consult our multiple help threads.

-JT



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The shop is current glitching and I am unable to issue you with your standard issue gear, this will be corrected as soon as possible.