Post by Sepp Reinard on Dec 2, 2008 19:56:41 GMT
Although the app is creative and lengthy which is nice, there are a good many grammatical and punctuational errors. I've accepted you account and created your profile with the rank of Obergefreiter (in between corporal and Private).
-JT
Account email: EDITED OUT!
Name: Sepp Reinard
Nationality: Czechslovkian (spelt wrong)
Army: Nazi/german army
Character history:
Sepp Reinard , Was born may 10th, 1923, the day Rolf Ran away form home Sepp went with him, he always looked up to his big brother,
young sepp went and joined the whermacht the same day his brother joined the SS, tho Sepp was a better rank than Rolf, Rolf was still a smarter and better soldier Than sepp, Sepp was a bit jealous but not really he loved his brother too much to be jealous
When Rolf Was sen to the eastern front and sepp was sent to the western front, Sepp always thought if his brother was alive or dead , At nights he would weep with sorrow of missing his dad, and Rolf , but he knew he had to stay strong and come home safely form this battle,
when, Sepp got a chance for leave to go home, he went to where his family had, live to discover another family lived there, "Hello? Pop? you here?" said sepp
"Who are you?" Asked a woman who now owned the house
"Hi, im Sepp Reinard, my Father lives here" Said Sepp
"Sorry, to tell you this but old man Reinard Was Found dead, down the street 1 year ago, He was drunk, he walked out in front of a speeding car, It killed him before they got him to the hospital, they said he coudln't of felt a thign tho, he was too drunk to feel any pain" Said the woman
Sepp broke down into tears, "My pop it cant be i jsut saw him a year and a half ago, i can't believe he is gone," Weeped sepp.
"I gotta find Rolf and tell him, i know ill ask to be sent to the eastern front!" Thought Sepp
Writing sample:
Sepp went down to the whermacht headquaters in berlin, "Hello Officer Sepp reinard Reporting for duty! Sir!" Yelled Sepp
"I'd like to be transfered to the eastern fornt with Rolf Reinard sir!" said Sepp
"Okay, good luck!" said the Higher ranking officer
Two weeks later sepp was in russia to STALINGRAD (now volgograd)
"Hey! Pvt. Have you seen a Rolf Reinard around here?" ask sepp to a War Tired Pvt.
"Well, Have you?" Asked Sepp, Sepp walked up to the soldier and tapped him on the shoulder, he noticed a dark red spot on the mans uniform and knew what was wrong,Sepp Screamed "MEDIC!!!"
A Medic quickly rushed to Where Sepp and the soldier were "o my god" said the Medic, "this man has no chance sorry officer" Said the Medic
"Medic, how doesn't this man have a chance?" asked Sepp
"He's Lost too much blood he won't make it even if we do help" Said the Medic anxiously to go help a soldier who wasn't as badly injured
" I'm Sorry but i need ot get moving" said the medic while taking off
"You bastard russians!!!!" Screamed Sepp, Sepp grabbed the soldiers rifle and took off running toward a Russian field hospital,
He Ran up a stairway he saw that was near the field hospital, He Took his gernade and threw it through where there was once a big glass window, He heard the russians yelling "Grenade!!!" then BOOM, the grenade had exploded killing many russians that where in there, When a russian came out he shot them,
When they begged for mercy he shot them, He noticed he was out of ammo, "Shit" he thoguht kowign that there was more russian coming, He dropped the rifle and pulled out his pistol to kill the next russian to come out, POW POW Two russians dropped dead, Sepp could understand russian, and spoke it fleuntly, "Charge the german postions and don't let up they have killed many russians in this buildign we are the only ones in this sector left give them hell! AHHH MOTHERLAND!" he heard the russians Yell.
Three ran out an officer, and two soldiers with ppsh's POW POW he took the two soldiers out, he ran out of ammo the russian officer didn't knwo where Sepp was, He peered around looking to see if he could see him, Sepp jumped off the stairs onto the russian officer Beating him senseless with a russian helmet he picked off of a dead russian soldier, "Please don't kill me" Pleaded the russian, "You bastards probally killed my brother! you bastards are monsters!" Yelled Sepp at the russian, the russian grabbed ofr his knife and hit Sepp in the leg with it,
"AHHHHHHHHHHHHH" Screamed Sepp in pain, Sepp grabbed the nearest pistol and jammed it into the officers head, POW, The officer was then dead, Sepp tried to limp back to base with the knife in his leg, He then heard alot of russian being spoken, he jumped into a crater and waited and listened.
OSS: Dear Erhard, i am the oen on austins site who wrote the sepp reianrd application along with rolf reinard and giovanni del mongo and dimitri petrenkov on austins site, lol btw whats your charecter name on austins ww2 rpg ?
-JT
Account email: EDITED OUT!
Name: Sepp Reinard
Nationality: Czechslovkian (spelt wrong)
Army: Nazi/german army
Character history:
Sepp Reinard , Was born may 10th, 1923, the day Rolf Ran away form home Sepp went with him, he always looked up to his big brother,
young sepp went and joined the whermacht the same day his brother joined the SS, tho Sepp was a better rank than Rolf, Rolf was still a smarter and better soldier Than sepp, Sepp was a bit jealous but not really he loved his brother too much to be jealous
When Rolf Was sen to the eastern front and sepp was sent to the western front, Sepp always thought if his brother was alive or dead , At nights he would weep with sorrow of missing his dad, and Rolf , but he knew he had to stay strong and come home safely form this battle,
when, Sepp got a chance for leave to go home, he went to where his family had, live to discover another family lived there, "Hello? Pop? you here?" said sepp
"Who are you?" Asked a woman who now owned the house
"Hi, im Sepp Reinard, my Father lives here" Said Sepp
"Sorry, to tell you this but old man Reinard Was Found dead, down the street 1 year ago, He was drunk, he walked out in front of a speeding car, It killed him before they got him to the hospital, they said he coudln't of felt a thign tho, he was too drunk to feel any pain" Said the woman
Sepp broke down into tears, "My pop it cant be i jsut saw him a year and a half ago, i can't believe he is gone," Weeped sepp.
"I gotta find Rolf and tell him, i know ill ask to be sent to the eastern front!" Thought Sepp
Writing sample:
Sepp went down to the whermacht headquaters in berlin, "Hello Officer Sepp reinard Reporting for duty! Sir!" Yelled Sepp
"I'd like to be transfered to the eastern fornt with Rolf Reinard sir!" said Sepp
"Okay, good luck!" said the Higher ranking officer
Two weeks later sepp was in russia to STALINGRAD (now volgograd)
"Hey! Pvt. Have you seen a Rolf Reinard around here?" ask sepp to a War Tired Pvt.
"Well, Have you?" Asked Sepp, Sepp walked up to the soldier and tapped him on the shoulder, he noticed a dark red spot on the mans uniform and knew what was wrong,Sepp Screamed "MEDIC!!!"
A Medic quickly rushed to Where Sepp and the soldier were "o my god" said the Medic, "this man has no chance sorry officer" Said the Medic
"Medic, how doesn't this man have a chance?" asked Sepp
"He's Lost too much blood he won't make it even if we do help" Said the Medic anxiously to go help a soldier who wasn't as badly injured
" I'm Sorry but i need ot get moving" said the medic while taking off
"You bastard russians!!!!" Screamed Sepp, Sepp grabbed the soldiers rifle and took off running toward a Russian field hospital,
He Ran up a stairway he saw that was near the field hospital, He Took his gernade and threw it through where there was once a big glass window, He heard the russians yelling "Grenade!!!" then BOOM, the grenade had exploded killing many russians that where in there, When a russian came out he shot them,
When they begged for mercy he shot them, He noticed he was out of ammo, "Shit" he thoguht kowign that there was more russian coming, He dropped the rifle and pulled out his pistol to kill the next russian to come out, POW POW Two russians dropped dead, Sepp could understand russian, and spoke it fleuntly, "Charge the german postions and don't let up they have killed many russians in this buildign we are the only ones in this sector left give them hell! AHHH MOTHERLAND!" he heard the russians Yell.
Three ran out an officer, and two soldiers with ppsh's POW POW he took the two soldiers out, he ran out of ammo the russian officer didn't knwo where Sepp was, He peered around looking to see if he could see him, Sepp jumped off the stairs onto the russian officer Beating him senseless with a russian helmet he picked off of a dead russian soldier, "Please don't kill me" Pleaded the russian, "You bastards probally killed my brother! you bastards are monsters!" Yelled Sepp at the russian, the russian grabbed ofr his knife and hit Sepp in the leg with it,
"AHHHHHHHHHHHHH" Screamed Sepp in pain, Sepp grabbed the nearest pistol and jammed it into the officers head, POW, The officer was then dead, Sepp tried to limp back to base with the knife in his leg, He then heard alot of russian being spoken, he jumped into a crater and waited and listened.
OSS: Dear Erhard, i am the oen on austins site who wrote the sepp reianrd application along with rolf reinard and giovanni del mongo and dimitri petrenkov on austins site, lol btw whats your charecter name on austins ww2 rpg ?