Post by GUEST2 on Oct 22, 2008 5:16:03 GMT
I will accept this and give you the rank of Corporal. This app isn't too bad, splitting it into paragraphs would have gotten you a sergeant rank, and keeping the same tense might have even pulled down a Staff Sergeant rank with the combination. Welcome and please read the rules before jumping into it to quickly 
-JT
Account E-Mail: EDITED OUT!
Name: Ashlyn Gisele V. Martin
Nationality: German
What Army will Your Character Serve Beneath?
UK or US: UK
Character History:
Ash, named after his deceased sisters, was born in a peaceful farm south of Berlin, on September 2nd, 1923. His father was a noble, living a rich life in Berlin, having no knowledge of his son, Ash being the consequence of rape. When he was young, his mother would deny it, but eventually, Ash learned of his biological father's actions and of his sister's deaths, caused on by a motorcar collision. His sister's father lived with them, and Ash was forced to work day and night a hard life on the farm, but he could not take it. He saw these pictures of famous movie stars, and he lay awake every night, anxious for the day he could get his chance, tired of waking up every day to work and have no one to go to. He pondered on his motivations, every night, wondering why, in our limited lives, must we go on living and do what we do.
At age 15, he finally snapped and ran away. He couldn't live his monotonous and uneventful life, where every day, he worked until dinner, then slept. Where every day, he would work away, not even having to concentrate, listening to the drone of motorcars speeding by. Out in the open, it was different. With no past knowledge, only the feeling of working, he was overwhelmed, confused by all the people. Instead of going back to his life, he thought he would take a car somewhere, to experience the world. He thought it would be different, but every stop he got to, he felt like some farm boy confused by the bright lights. But one stop was special.
He finally stopped at a small town in Poland where he found the perfect mix he dreamed he would be going to. A place where people tried as hard as he had to before to make ends meet, but where movie stars ruled, or in this case, stage performers. The invasion of Poland would begin two months later, however, and when they attacked, they hit the city really hard. Ash and two other families managed to run away though, and got to England, where Ash tried to enlist with his friend, but found out he didn't meet the education requirements, having never gone to school. Thus, he set out to study, living with the escaped family, and managed to get in at the age 16. Signing on as a "Red Devil" he managed through training with some difficulty and finally saw combat three months ago.
Military Rank:
Any NCO rank
Writing Sample:
Scenario: You’re alone behind enemy lines and you get the eerie feeling someone’s watching you. You’re trying to remain quiet, stay low, work your way back to the frontlines - but you can’t help but feel you’re being followed… (How does your character React? What’s running through their mind?)
Ashlyn's head was spinning, his ribs aching and his leg burning. He stumbled around, constantly hearing the sounds of soft footsteps, drowned out by the noise of gunfire and the drone of insects in the night. Clenching his Webley tight, Ash leaned on a willow, staring at an odd shadow in the darkness. He choked on his own words, and looked around, sweat dripping down his forehead. Suddenly, Ash was thrown to the ground, his ears ringing, and his eyes forced shut, bewildered at the sight.
An artillery barrage had began, and a shell hit only ten meters away. He tried getting up, but his whole body pained, and he struggled to open his eyes. Although he couldn't see, he could just barely hear bloodcurdling screaming, and he squinted, seeing soldiers all over the place, but he couldn't recognize them. Then everything went black, he could hear one last scream before he passed out...
Ashlyn woke a couple hours later, to the sound of a Thompson, mowing down some poor Nazi bastard. He looked towards the sound and saw some guy from boot camp, reloading his Thompson, bullets whizzing above his head. Ash sat up, and even though it hurt like hell to say it, he managed to yell above the shooting, "Where are we?!" and the soldier looked at him and opened his mouth, but no words came out. Ash blinked his eyes, then saw a trickle of blood on the man's shoulder, and he finally noticed that the soldier had been shot through the head. So Gisele grabbed the soldiers gun out of instinct and sprayed the Germans over his head.
-JT
Account E-Mail: EDITED OUT!
Name: Ashlyn Gisele V. Martin
Nationality: German
What Army will Your Character Serve Beneath?
UK or US: UK
Character History:
Ash, named after his deceased sisters, was born in a peaceful farm south of Berlin, on September 2nd, 1923. His father was a noble, living a rich life in Berlin, having no knowledge of his son, Ash being the consequence of rape. When he was young, his mother would deny it, but eventually, Ash learned of his biological father's actions and of his sister's deaths, caused on by a motorcar collision. His sister's father lived with them, and Ash was forced to work day and night a hard life on the farm, but he could not take it. He saw these pictures of famous movie stars, and he lay awake every night, anxious for the day he could get his chance, tired of waking up every day to work and have no one to go to. He pondered on his motivations, every night, wondering why, in our limited lives, must we go on living and do what we do.
At age 15, he finally snapped and ran away. He couldn't live his monotonous and uneventful life, where every day, he worked until dinner, then slept. Where every day, he would work away, not even having to concentrate, listening to the drone of motorcars speeding by. Out in the open, it was different. With no past knowledge, only the feeling of working, he was overwhelmed, confused by all the people. Instead of going back to his life, he thought he would take a car somewhere, to experience the world. He thought it would be different, but every stop he got to, he felt like some farm boy confused by the bright lights. But one stop was special.
He finally stopped at a small town in Poland where he found the perfect mix he dreamed he would be going to. A place where people tried as hard as he had to before to make ends meet, but where movie stars ruled, or in this case, stage performers. The invasion of Poland would begin two months later, however, and when they attacked, they hit the city really hard. Ash and two other families managed to run away though, and got to England, where Ash tried to enlist with his friend, but found out he didn't meet the education requirements, having never gone to school. Thus, he set out to study, living with the escaped family, and managed to get in at the age 16. Signing on as a "Red Devil" he managed through training with some difficulty and finally saw combat three months ago.
Military Rank:
Any NCO rank
Writing Sample:
Scenario: You’re alone behind enemy lines and you get the eerie feeling someone’s watching you. You’re trying to remain quiet, stay low, work your way back to the frontlines - but you can’t help but feel you’re being followed… (How does your character React? What’s running through their mind?)
Ashlyn's head was spinning, his ribs aching and his leg burning. He stumbled around, constantly hearing the sounds of soft footsteps, drowned out by the noise of gunfire and the drone of insects in the night. Clenching his Webley tight, Ash leaned on a willow, staring at an odd shadow in the darkness. He choked on his own words, and looked around, sweat dripping down his forehead. Suddenly, Ash was thrown to the ground, his ears ringing, and his eyes forced shut, bewildered at the sight.
An artillery barrage had began, and a shell hit only ten meters away. He tried getting up, but his whole body pained, and he struggled to open his eyes. Although he couldn't see, he could just barely hear bloodcurdling screaming, and he squinted, seeing soldiers all over the place, but he couldn't recognize them. Then everything went black, he could hear one last scream before he passed out...
Ashlyn woke a couple hours later, to the sound of a Thompson, mowing down some poor Nazi bastard. He looked towards the sound and saw some guy from boot camp, reloading his Thompson, bullets whizzing above his head. Ash sat up, and even though it hurt like hell to say it, he managed to yell above the shooting, "Where are we?!" and the soldier looked at him and opened his mouth, but no words came out. Ash blinked his eyes, then saw a trickle of blood on the man's shoulder, and he finally noticed that the soldier had been shot through the head. So Gisele grabbed the soldiers gun out of instinct and sprayed the Germans over his head.