Joinig the Usa forces [Unfinished]

[Daniel Brown Allied Forces]

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Name: Daniel Brown

Nationality: USA

What army will your character sever beneath: USA

Character History: Daniel was a normal person in back at home he lived in New York with his Wife and two sons, they were always happy togather, until one day he left home from work and came back to see his house on fire he was never happay then so he join the army to blow some steam off. His age is 23

Military Rank: Private

Writing Sample: Private Daniel and his platoon was suppose to charge through enemy lines tonight at 1609 hours from now he was in his tent packing all of his things to move out. He and all the other men was rounded up by Sgt. Brown, his brother he gave a peep talk to his squad including me, which I wasn't paying attention because i was loading my M4. Come on lets get out there, he thought. He was ready for anything but it wasn't time yet. He went into his tent and slept until his brother Sgt. Brown came in and said "Wake up, were moving out" Daniel got out of the tent and got into the back of a truck and drove

(i will finished it when i come back from school)

[joining the USA forces]

Account E-mail: [e-mail]

Name: Daniel Brown

Nationality: USA

What army will your character sever beneath: USA

Character History: Daniel was a normal person in back at home he lived in New York with his Wife and two sons, they were always happy together, until one day he left home from work and came back to see his house on fire he was never happy then so he join the army to blow some steam off. His age is 23 born on November 2
His dream was to become an NFL star but his family got in the
way. He is African American 5'5 and has light skin. He also
has a bad temper some times and can be an a**h**.
After the fire he lived with his grandparents helping them around
the house. He had always felt dishonored about living with his parents. He became a thief but always was quiet so he was never caught. He always wanted to pay back to all the things he did as a thief so he decided to join the army. When he had join the army his parents was mad so they would not welcome him back home but he knows they are worried, so he fights to stay alive.

Military Rank: Private

Writing Sample: Private Daniel and his platoon was suppose to charge through enemy lines tonight at 1609 hours from now he was in his tent packing all of his things to move out. He and all the other men was rounded up by Sgt. Brown, his brother he gave a peep talk to his squad including me, which I wasn't paying attention because i was loading my M4. Come on lets get out there, he thought. He was ready for anything but it wasn't time yet. He went into his tent and slept until his brother Sgt. Brown came in and said "Wake up, were moving out" Daniel got out of the tent and got into the back of a truck and drove on to the enemy lines.

He was a little frightening though, the truck came to a stop Sgt. Brown was out of the truck ordering people to set up a nest for us, or dig a fox hole to retreat in. When he got out Daniel took out his shovel and dig a fox hole when he finished he spit on his hands and rubbed them together. As a few minituis passed the Sgt. orders us to move out, we was put in to a group of two Daniel was patterned with a guy named Pr. Miller. We moved out i walked slow my eyes wide open i see other guys shaking through fear.All of a sudden there was a BOOM i shot my head around and looked back ahead, Sgt. Brown was screaming "Artillery strikes run! I ran as fast as i can up a hill dirt flying every where. When he stopped he was in a clearing, he looked around for Pr.Miller or anybody. Damn i'm dead meat he thought. he was walking slowly back where he came from always watching his back,he heard something moving in a tree.

He shot around raised his gun and shot at the spot. A dead German feel to the ground, F*** I'm the middle of nowhere with a bunch of Nazi's he thought. He ran as fast as he can running through tree's, he hears a gun shot so he runs even faster. Then he stops and hides behind a tree breathing hard. Then runs again Damn, damn, damn, damn he says over and over in his head. Then out off nowhere he hears a loud noise and a stabbing pain at his legs.

He falls to the ground, grabbing his leg he gasp for air then he looks up and see's a German. The German point's his gun in Pr. Brown face and mutter something in German. He hears another sound and the German falls to the floor and he feel himself being lifted up. And he know he had been saved, then he past out form all the blood he lost.

[joing the USA forces]

and if i can be a cropral i would like to be that rank,and i spelled it wrong

[Nathan Whyte]

Hi Daniel. Your character history is enough to scrape Private, so I'll accept you to the site at that rank.

Just a note about your writing sample, you keep changing your point of view. In this site, we only write in the third person-past, whilst in your app you keep switiching between third person (Private Daniel and his platoon was suppose to charge through enemy lines tonight at 1609 hours from now he was in his tent packing all of his things to move out) and first person ( As a few minituis passed the Sgt. orders us to move out, we was put in to a group of two Daniel was patterned with a guy named Pr. Miller. We moved out i walked slow my eyes wide open i see other guys shaking through fear)

When you RP, try to stick in the third person-past. If you have any other questions, feel free to ask.

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