A Few Questions

[Stephen Colly]

As summer is here for me as I break up today, I shall be on here more often and have decided to improve my role playing skills over the summer so here are a few questions that I would be grateful if you guys could fill in:

1) What do you think of my characters? Are there any aspects where I could improve them?

2) What do you think of my writing style? Any way I can improve?

3) Would you say I do good story lines, if yes then which ones?

I know there is only three but it would just be really helpful for me as I like to improve things to the best of my ability.

Love
Kitty
xxx

[Leeroy Atherton]

1) What do you think of my characters? Are there any aspects where I could improve them?

In my opinion, your characters are very real and balanced, not to mention unique on IO. A large part of the plot deals with Stephen dealing with being gay, and his repressed feelings for Ed McMillan, which has helped spawn several episodes and created a page-turning storyline. Joe takes the war personally, since not only is fighting those who enslave his people, but is caught in the crossfire himself. He also has contributed to several episodes because of his conflict with Strumfelder.



2) What do you think of my writing style? Any way I can improve?

Your RP posts have a tendency to contain run-on sentences and repetitive, awkward wording. Luckily, these two issues are easy to fix; rereading your sentences and taking a second look with a thesaurus is a quick cure. As for your run-ons, these can be a result of a sudden release of thought, typed onto the page without realizing you're going on and on. After you put down a big chunk of text, make sure that it's not one comma after another, and that the reader can pause here and there. You can tire your reader's brain out by being lenient with the full stops.


3) Would you say I do good story lines, if yes then which ones?

See question one.


I hope this helps you out, Kitty.