Post by Lewis Jones on Sept 13, 2008 11:45:37 GMT
ACCEPTED:
You have a good many grammatical errors and a few punctuational errors as well, but corporal is an acceptable request to me for the application you have created.
-JT
Please create an account to go along with your application!
I'l try abd be more active this time.
Account E-mail: EDITED OUT!
Name: Luke Websta
Age: 18
Nationality:
British
What Army will you be serving under?
UK
Character History
Born in 1919 Luke was brought up in the noise city of London. He went to saint Georgia primary school and then went to a rough secondary school called London central secondary school. He had a rough life with his parents abusing him and the gangs at school picking on him. He was never a smart kid he got f’s and e’s ocasionaly a c but not enough for a well paying job.
At the age of 12 he ran away to Cardiff unfortunately he had to steal £50 from his mothers bank. But he was glad to get out of that mad house. He took a train to Cardiff for a brighter future. Four years went by Luke was a tramp. He thought what would happen if he stayed on in school what if he actually got a job in stead of struggling to live. Luke was walking by a radio shop and heared a report that there was a air raid in London last night by the Germans. A week went by and a large group of jeeps arrived at Cardiff Luke said to him self stay here and rot in a cardboard box or fight for queen and country plus he get a bed and food. He signed up for the army this was his chance to do something with his life. He trained hard but it was worth it. He joined the eighth arm and began his military career in North Affrica. He was promoted after an action in which his co and all near by nco’s had been killed or wounded.
Rank
corporal
RPG Sample
As Luke crawled to the voices he was scared that if they were foe he could be in deep trouble he could go to a torture chamber and die if friend thank the heavens he had not seen a friendly face since he came into these woods. But it wasn’t a friend it was foe if he could kill them with a magazine of 10 bullets then it would be miracle after all it was only a rusty old Thomson which was inaccurate.
Luke formed a plan he would shoot the floor to get there attention. He fired and the enemy jumped as they heard the bullet crashing down on the ground they went to check to see if it was the enemy but as they moved closer to the sound of the bullet Luke ran at a bush for cover. The enemy could see nothing and decided to turn back and march to their posts. As they walked Luke sneaked behind the tree and shot three accurate burst s towards one of them sending him crashing down to the stone cold floor. The other was injured badly but just before his death he called for reinforcements.
Luke was in trouble if he couldn’t think of a quick escape this sticky situation. He decided to take there guns and dropped his own as the ammo was exhausted. One enemy luckily had an MP40. As Luke hid in the bush to await the enemy reinforcements he reloaded the MP-40. Minuits went by before he sighted the enemy’s reinforcements he watched them as they ran to the dead body’s.
Luke aimed his shot and killed two of the three Germans. The German was more alert now he took cover behind a tree. Luke crawled towards the German and took a deep breath and got up and ran towards the enemy at point blank range he put 3 holes in his head as he fell to the ground Luke was lucky this time he was now more aware what the Germans were capable of.
Finally he thought to himself he had a chance to escape an unattended staff car lay parked in the snow. He rushed over jumped in and slammed the door after him. He accelerated forward and towards the Allied frontline.
You have a good many grammatical errors and a few punctuational errors as well, but corporal is an acceptable request to me for the application you have created.
-JT
Please create an account to go along with your application!
I'l try abd be more active this time.
Account E-mail: EDITED OUT!
Name: Luke Websta
Age: 18
Nationality:
British
What Army will you be serving under?
UK
Character History
Born in 1919 Luke was brought up in the noise city of London. He went to saint Georgia primary school and then went to a rough secondary school called London central secondary school. He had a rough life with his parents abusing him and the gangs at school picking on him. He was never a smart kid he got f’s and e’s ocasionaly a c but not enough for a well paying job.
At the age of 12 he ran away to Cardiff unfortunately he had to steal £50 from his mothers bank. But he was glad to get out of that mad house. He took a train to Cardiff for a brighter future. Four years went by Luke was a tramp. He thought what would happen if he stayed on in school what if he actually got a job in stead of struggling to live. Luke was walking by a radio shop and heared a report that there was a air raid in London last night by the Germans. A week went by and a large group of jeeps arrived at Cardiff Luke said to him self stay here and rot in a cardboard box or fight for queen and country plus he get a bed and food. He signed up for the army this was his chance to do something with his life. He trained hard but it was worth it. He joined the eighth arm and began his military career in North Affrica. He was promoted after an action in which his co and all near by nco’s had been killed or wounded.
Rank
corporal
RPG Sample
As Luke crawled to the voices he was scared that if they were foe he could be in deep trouble he could go to a torture chamber and die if friend thank the heavens he had not seen a friendly face since he came into these woods. But it wasn’t a friend it was foe if he could kill them with a magazine of 10 bullets then it would be miracle after all it was only a rusty old Thomson which was inaccurate.
Luke formed a plan he would shoot the floor to get there attention. He fired and the enemy jumped as they heard the bullet crashing down on the ground they went to check to see if it was the enemy but as they moved closer to the sound of the bullet Luke ran at a bush for cover. The enemy could see nothing and decided to turn back and march to their posts. As they walked Luke sneaked behind the tree and shot three accurate burst s towards one of them sending him crashing down to the stone cold floor. The other was injured badly but just before his death he called for reinforcements.
Luke was in trouble if he couldn’t think of a quick escape this sticky situation. He decided to take there guns and dropped his own as the ammo was exhausted. One enemy luckily had an MP40. As Luke hid in the bush to await the enemy reinforcements he reloaded the MP-40. Minuits went by before he sighted the enemy’s reinforcements he watched them as they ran to the dead body’s.
Luke aimed his shot and killed two of the three Germans. The German was more alert now he took cover behind a tree. Luke crawled towards the German and took a deep breath and got up and ran towards the enemy at point blank range he put 3 holes in his head as he fell to the ground Luke was lucky this time he was now more aware what the Germans were capable of.
Finally he thought to himself he had a chance to escape an unattended staff car lay parked in the snow. He rushed over jumped in and slammed the door after him. He accelerated forward and towards the Allied frontline.